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Return to every man a king.

The sunlight was finally retreating, but the terrible heat remained. For weeks, the high temperatures had seemed to be a lock against the wind: every flag, every leaf on every tree hung like a body.

The children, sensing the storm coming up across the lake, left their dinners untouched.

They stood out in the front yard, drowning under the thick sky. The black clouds swirled up around them, filling their eyes.

Kevin Fanning may be contacted at kevfan@yahoo.com. His website whygodwhy is highly recommended.

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